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Internet when used a source of information, has more drawback than advantages. To what extent do you agree with this statement.

#internet #source #information #drawback
Internet
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 has become one of the most significant technological development worldwide and
essential
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 part of human life.
However
, there is a statement that
internet
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the internet
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 has more disadvantages rather than advantages. In
this
 essay, I will provide some reasons why
people
 have
this
 view about
internet
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the internet
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.
Firstly
, many
people
 believe that
internet
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the internet
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 is
not
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no
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reliable
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a reliable
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 method of searching
information
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for information
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. When
user
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a user
the user
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 is looking for particular
information
, many pages with spam and advertisement appear on the screen of
device
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the device
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.
Moreover
, many
website
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websites
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 offer different
information
 with
different
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a different
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opinion
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opinions
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 on the same search, and
this
 is one of the points why many
people
 are not trustful about the
internet
 accuracy.
Nevertheless
, there are lots of reliable and credible sources of
information
such
 as BBC, the Guardian or Sky News that do not provide fake
information
 for
internet
users
.
Second
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The second
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 reason might be
internet
 bullying or
in other words
 “cyberbullying” and many
users
 had
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the experience
an experience
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experience
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of
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with
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 it. In recent years,
cyberattack
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cyberattacks
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 become a common issue
in
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on
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internet
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the internet
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.
Users
 can experience hacking their social media accounts and using their personal
information
 against them or
in other words
 intimidation. For
this
 reason, many parents try to protect their children by reducing their access to the
internet
.
Person
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A person
The person
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 can protect himself from hacking or cyberbullying by using only trustful and quality web pages, do not click on
suspicious
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a suspicious
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link
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links
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 that
appear
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appears
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 on some websites and do not tell
password
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passwords
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 for
his
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their
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 social media to other
people
.
Summarising
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,
internet
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the internet
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 as a source of
information
 has
as
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apply
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positive and as negative impacts
for
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on
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 society. Now, there are many various online protection sources are available for
users
 for free in order to make
internet
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reliable
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a reliable
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 and safe resource of
information
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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