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Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when traveling, etc.). Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
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 tech-savvy modern world, software technology is so advanced that it not only connects people across the globe but
also
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 it will allow them to
work
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 remotely.
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 there are some drawbacks to the
tele-
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telework
work
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 model;
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, I believe that telecommuting
do
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 have more
postive
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positive
 outcomes than challenges.
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 with, telecommuting provides
flexibility
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 for employees and employers. To explain
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, some workers with access to the internet connection can complete their
work
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 from anywhere it could be home, office,
and
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or
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 even
in
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travel.
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, during the pandemic lockdowns, telework
work
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 helped most of the workers to continue their jobs to serve their employer without commuting to
office
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the office
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.
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, employers have
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great
flexibility
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 to hire
desired
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the desired
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resource
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resources
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 from any country across the globe.
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, I worked for the Candian company remotely from India for three years.
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, apart from the job
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, telecommuting help to reduce air pollution and traffic.
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 and foremost, the more number of people working from home leads to reduce the vehicles used to commute to the workplace which
diminish
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diminishes
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 the traffic during peak office hours.
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, air pollution reduces as
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emission
emotion
emition
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the emition
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 of carbon monoxide into the atmosphere is decreased due to
reduced
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the reduced
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 number of automobiles
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on
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in roads
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inroads
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.
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, to recapitulate, telecommuting is a great innovation for mankind, there are many positive outcomes from remote
work
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 which are explained above
such
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 as
flexibility
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 for employers & employees and
reduces
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reduced
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 traffic & pollution. From my perspective, remote
work
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 benefits outweigh the disadvantages.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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