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To succeed in business, one needs to learn and know math. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The table and pie
chart
illustrate
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population
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the population
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 in Australia in terms of nationalities as well as areas. Overall, what stands out from the table and
chart
 is that the majority number of people in
Autralia
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Australia
 is Australian, meanwhile, the
percentage
 of Dutch occupies the lowest position. Interestingly, the proportion
for
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of
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 people residing in the city is much larger than
this
 in the countryside. Looking at the
chart
 in more detail, the leading position belongs to the proportion of the Australian, at around 73%, which is nearly 70 times as much as the
percentage
 of the Dutch.
Besides
, while the ratio of British makes up only 7%, the proportion of New
Zealander
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Zealanders
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 and Chinese is nearly the same at around 2%.
In addition
, the
percentage
 of
other
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others
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 stands in the
second
 place in terms of nationalities, at nearly 15%. When it comes to the pie
chart
, the
percentage
 of the
Australian
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Australians
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 and the Dutch living in the cities is approximate
at
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four-fifths, which is around 4 times higher than that in the countryside.
Similarly
, the ratio of the British and the New
Zealander
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Zealanders
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 residing in the rural areas is nearly the same at one-tenth, the figures for
two
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the two
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 nationalities are 10 times as little as those ones in the metropolitans.
Furthermore
, there is only 1%
in
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of
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 the number of Chinese
living
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live
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 in the countryside, the others
residing
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reside
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 in the big cities.
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