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In many countries, people are having fewer children. What are the advantages and disadvantages of small families?

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It is true that small families are bringing up fewer kids in recent years.
This
 is a common topic of discussion in society. There are some advantages and disadvantages.
First
 of all, having fewer
children
 means having more simple family relations,
less
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 dependence on the relative network which can reduce the family life’s
contradiction
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 and the dispute. They are more likely to form
in
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the equal relations
of
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with
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 the whole family and the democratic atmosphere
,
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 is helpful in the training young people’s independence,which meets the different generations of different
life
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lifestyle
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style
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 of pursuing.
Secondly
, having fewer kids can reduce household expenses and relieve family stress. They can create a better living and learning environment for their
children
. Families can generally
enroll
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 their
children
 in dancing,music, gymnastics, or other types of extra-curricular training that will give them greater confidence and time management skills in their future development, in order to better adapt to society.
However
, each coin has two sides. For members of a small family, the level of intimacy is sufficient.
As a result
 ,it is easy to alienate relatives and friends outside the family. Due to the usual and grandparents,uncle, aunt relationship is not close, in the face of
difficulties
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 there will always be the feeling of no relatives. In conclusion, bringing up limited
children
 can help the small family form more simple
relationship
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relationships
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 and relieve family burdens.
Conversely
, it may lead to
the
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 distant relationship and loneliness.
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