Governemment invertments in the arts, such as music and theathre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree

The future of a country depends on the
investemenst
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investment
investments
the ruling government is making. Generally,
strategy
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the strategy
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to invest capital varies from case to case.
For example
, developed countries can invest in arts, music and other activities.
In contrast
, poor economy countries should invest the money in basic
aminities
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amenities
such
as food, shelter,
clothing
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and clothing
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of
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for
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their population. In
this
essay, I will discuss
about
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apply
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the
spendings
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spending
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of the
goverment
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government
on entertainment activities like theatre, music..etc and on basic
requiements
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requirements
like public transport, courts and other minimum requirements of the people
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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