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The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So governments and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world #people #situation #governments #organizations #amount #damage #environment
There's no doubt about the environmental problem we are facing now are so great but there's still hope that we can overcome
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 before it's too late.
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 take
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 now there might be a chance we can see the changes in our
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 it will be huge. Starting from the
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point that government and organization should participate in
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 changes and motivate others as much as a government and other organizations can.So they have to play
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 role in
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 act by giving awareness through social media and arranging
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 the major things we have to control is
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 of plastic and electronics because these items once they had been used will not
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 as fast as the other items we used. So
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reducing the
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 of these items or replacing them
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 other disposable
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 will help out.
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, the era in which we are living can help us
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 in overcoming
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 issue because now we can spread our voice all over the world by just sharing our deeds online on social media and the people can contribute
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 our work as well. Contribution can be in form of spreading your words or donating
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 you in
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 work. So if you say in my opinion I agree that governments should help the people who are taking
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 on improving the environmental problems
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