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Some people believe that technology has made the lives of workers easier whilst other people disagree. To what extent do you agree or disagree

#people #technology #lives #workers #whilst
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Nowasdays
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,
technology
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 is developing
from
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day by day which is very helpful for all
people
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 who are
a
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apply
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workers
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. It plays
an
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 significant role to assist
people
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 in
variety
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 of works. It is agreed that
technology
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 can
made
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 the lives of
worker
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workers
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 easier t. Working with
technology
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 without stuck as well as
inhance
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enhance
 more
people
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 lifestyle.
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, as the view of covid
pademic
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pandemic
epidemic
, many
worker
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workers
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 around the world are difficult to go to
work
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. Some
companies
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 are bankrupt due to the lack of
technology
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.
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,
many
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companies
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 and
factory
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factories
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 which are using modern
techonlogy
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technology
, their
workers
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 no need to spend much time
to go
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 to
work
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.
Workers
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 only need their computer and internet connection to continue their
work
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 from home.
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 it makes clear that
technology
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 still support
workers
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 even in
difficult
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 situation.
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,
Technology
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improvs
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improves
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 the
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workers
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worker's
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 connectivity with other
people
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 all over the world. Some
companies
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are not
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are not working
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work
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 with each other inside their
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workplace
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work place
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workplace
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, they need to connect and build more communication with
people
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 from outside of their country.
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, some
companies
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 which are having the big company from oversea, so they need start using the different kinds of
trustfull
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trustful
 app or website
such
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 as Zoom, Google Meet, and so no. These
app
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apps
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 help
workers
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 to meet and discuss their working process
without
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face to face with each other.
Workers
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 no need to waste too much time and save their money for travel.
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 it is proved that
technology
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support
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supports
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workers
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 without any
doutful
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doubtful
. To sum up,
techonology
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technology
 is an important one for
improve
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improving
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people
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people's
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work life
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work-life
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eventhough
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even though
 in the
spead
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speed
 out of difficulty. More
techonology
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technology
 create more
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people
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people's
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 lifestyle.
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 we can say that
people
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 really need
techology
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technology
 as a part of their workplace or homeplace to expand their working efficiently. After
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through
throught
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analyze
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on
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this
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 topic, I can predict that the
technology
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 demand will
be rise
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 up in the future to support
workers
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 due to the more
developing
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development
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 and
creating
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creation
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 of the factories, private and public
sector
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sectors
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.
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