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In many countries fast food is becoming cheaper and more widely available. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages.

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Fast
food
is increase
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 rapidly in all countries, due to
plethora
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the plethora
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 of choices and reasonable
prize
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price
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.
People
 find it desirable and convenient to eat
this
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this food item
these food items
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food
 items, they please their
teste
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taste
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 more than regular
food
.
This
 essay will discuss both sides, and my opinion
also
be
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a highlight
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highlight
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. To commence with, there are
few
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a few
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 advantages of consuming
the
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apply
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junk
food
. The foremost one
that is
, 95 % of
people
 consider street
food
 as a one time meal
,
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 because it is low prize
food
also
it
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prepared
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 quickly. So,
it's
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save
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saves
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 time.
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A person
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Person
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People
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 from hectic
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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 mostly
prefer
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prefers
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these
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this precooked food
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precooked
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pre-cooked
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food
.
In addition
, there are umpteen choices in each
food
, so,
individual
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individuals
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 can choose
food
 as per their mood or what they want.
For example
,nowadays,due to the advancement of technology,
people
 are able to order
food
 via mobile phones ,
such
 as
,
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Zomato, Swiggy, Domino's pizza,Uber eats and many more,
this
 app can
delivered
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 any
food
at
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apply
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24x7.
Thus
, it is easy for
people
 to eat anything
in
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at in
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 anytime. On the flip side, in spite of
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positive
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positives
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 connected with fast
food
,
it
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 negatives should not be
the
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neglected . The
first
 drawback is that
,
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majority
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the majority
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 of snacks are unhealthy and lower quality
food
, which
effects
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affects
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on
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peoples
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people's
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 health.
Such
 as ,
the
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sugary snacks cause
the
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diabetes,high cholesterol,heart dieses and many others.
Furthermore
 , the more consumption of junk
food
 leads
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the
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an
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increasing
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of
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in
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 obesity and
risk
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the risk
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 of other problems.
For example
, In
current
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 era, when both
parent
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parents
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going
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for
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to
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works
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work
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, they give some extra money to their child to eat
somthing
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something
 from
market
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the market
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, and kids attract the advertisement of
food
 which is unhealthy. The main reason behind the trend that why children eat outside because less cooking healthy meals at home.
Likwise
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Likewise
 ,
food
 from outside is tested delicious but it is not nutrients and hygienic, it
also
not
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does not
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 give the necessary vitamins and calcium. Eat fast
food
 on daily basis
people
 are habit from
prosessed
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processed
food
. In conclusion ,
people
's health is most important than anything else, they should try to reduce the overuse of street
food
, which
great
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has great
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 effects
in
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on
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peoples
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people's
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body
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bodies
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.After
Scrutinized
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 the
further
 paragraphs I think
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 of fast
food
are
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outweigh
it's
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its
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 advantages because nothing is more important than healthy living .
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