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the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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The bar chart compares the buying and drinking habits of
coffee
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 and tea in five cities in Australia, namely Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
Adelaide
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, and Hobart. The unit is measured in percentage. Overall, most
people
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 relied on
coffee
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 or tea.
People
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 who lived in five Australian cities showed more
interested
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interest
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 in buying a
coffee
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 or tea in the cafe than buying a fresh
coffee
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 in the
last
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four
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weeks
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. Most residents in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, and Hobart visited
cafe
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cafes
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 very often, with nearly 60%, 64%, 56% and 63% respectively.
However
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, there are less than half of
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people
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the people
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who lived
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lived
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living
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 in
Adelaide
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 went to a
coffee
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 shop in the past
four
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weeks
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.
Also
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,
people
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 in
Adelaide
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 seemed to
bought
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buy
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 instant
coffee
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 more often, with about 50%. There is a little difference between
people
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 buying instant
coffee
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 in the
last
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four
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weeks
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, with the range between 45% and 55%, while
people
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Correct pronoun usage
who lived
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lived
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living
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 in
Habart
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Hobart
 accounts for the most, with approximately 54%.
Furthermore
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, Australian seemed seldom
buying
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buy
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 instant
coffee
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, especially those who resided in Brisbane and
Adelaide
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, with about 34% of
people
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 used
in
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it in
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 the past
four
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weeks
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.
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