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the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

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The bar chart compares the buying and drinking habits of
coffee
 and tea in five cities in Australia, namely Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane,
Adelaide
, and Hobart. The unit is measured in percentage. Overall, most
people
 relied on
coffee
 or tea.
People
 who lived in five Australian cities showed more
interested
Replace the word
interest
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 in buying a
coffee
 or tea in the cafe than buying a fresh
coffee
 in the
last
four
weeks
. Most residents in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, and Hobart visited
cafe
Fix the agreement mistake
cafes
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 very often, with nearly 60%, 64%, 56% and 63% respectively.
However
, there are less than half of
people
Correct article usage
the people
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Correct pronoun usage
who lived
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lived
Wrong verb form
living
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 in
Adelaide
 went to a
coffee
 shop in the past
four
weeks
.
Also
,
people
 in
Adelaide
 seemed to
bought
Wrong verb form
buy
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 instant
coffee
 more often, with about 50%. There is a little difference between
people
 buying instant
coffee
 in the
last
four
weeks
, with the range between 45% and 55%, while
people
Correct pronoun usage
who lived
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lived
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living
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 in
Habart
Correct your spelling
Hobart
 accounts for the most, with approximately 54%.
Furthermore
, Australian seemed seldom
buying
Wrong verb form
buy
show examples
 instant
coffee
, especially those who resided in Brisbane and
Adelaide
, with about 34% of
people
 used
in
Correct pronoun usage
it in
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 the past
four
weeks
.
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