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The diagrams below are existing and proposed floor plans for the redevelopment of an art gallery.

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The
first
 graph illustrates the existing plan of an art gallery, while the
second
 graph shows the changes after redevelopment. Overall, the significant alters will be made in terms of the gallery used for different purposes. There will be a new entrance and more
spaces
 for the
exhibition
. From the plan so far, the entrance is connected to the lobby, and the Parkinson court is on the north
side
. The office is located on the south
side
 of the lobby, while two temporary
exhibition
spaces
 are built on the west
side
 of it.
Next
 to the temporary
exhibition
spaces
 is the permanent
exhibition
spaces
.
Also
, on the other
side
 of permanent
exhibition
spaces
, is not open to the public. Looking into the future plan, it is obvious that the entrance will move to the north, which is connecting the permanent
exhibition
spaces
. Meanwhile,
Parkinson
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 court remains unchanged. The permanent
exhibition
 space is almost two times bigger than now, and the temporary
exhibition
spaces
 will no longer exist.
Furthermore
, the lobby and office will be replaced by an education area and store. There is
also
 a new special
exhibition
 space added to the west.
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