Many governments think that economic grow is their most important goal. Some people, however, thinks that other type of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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of higher authorities think that economic
growth
is the most crucial goal for the betterment of the
country
. Whereas, on other hand, some individuals insist that not only economic
growth
but there are
also
some other types of progress which are equally essential for the
development
of the
country
.
To begin
with, governments think that economic
growth
is very important in developing countries as well as in developed countries because it helps the citizens of the nation to become better in
their
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every
aspects
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of life. Prioritizing
economy
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the economy
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, helps the nation to achieve
primary
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the primary
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needs of the people
such
as food, shelter, security, and accommodation.
Moreover
, a powerful economic
country
help
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the government to make more money and
then
utilise that money on developing facilities which
lead
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to
enhance
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the quality of one's life and
bring
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bringing
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prosperity to their region. Take China as an example, China's people have
far
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better lifestyle as they are government invested more in the
development
of
economy
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the economy
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rather than investing in other sections.
On the other hand
, there are
also
some other types of progress
such
as education facilities as well as tourism
development
. To illustrate
this
,
as
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we know that if the literacy level in a particular state is higher so, it
become
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easy for a
country
to achieve their goals more efficiently.
Furthermore
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tourism
development
also
play
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a vital role to generate income for the nation so,
therefore
government
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the government
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should take necessary steps
such
as advertising beautiful monuments , parks ,
eco-friendly
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and eco-friendly
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areas.
This
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measures will directly attract tourists to visit their
country
. For, example there are many European countries
who
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generate income from tourist attractions. To conclude
this
topic, I personally believe that underdeveloped regions should prefer
on
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economic
growth
in order to acquire
primary
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the primary
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needs
for
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of
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the citizens.
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education and tourism innovations should
be adopt
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by developing and developed lands.
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