The excess use of gadgets effect the child's development and body growth. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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uses
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of gadgets in
children
are in
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highly
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arguing
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point in
todays
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world
whereas
some people find it helpful to use
device
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devices
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to build up their skills. In
this
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will provide sufficient information about the bad impact on their health.
Children
are known as fast learners and gadget has been a common accessory in their daily life.
For
example
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if we see our daily routine, gadgets are often provided by parents when they fail to feed
the
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children
has become
very
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common issue in our society which is often
adviced
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advised
by the physicians not to do so. As these
increases
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their motivation to use the device at the same time it becomes
endangerous
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dangerous
to their health issue
thus
decreasing their
eysight
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eyesight
.
However
, watching television for longer than one hour can cause severe health
issue
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issues
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such
as
headache
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headaches
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, pain in eyesight and much more.
Children
should be given specific time
limit
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limits
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for the
uses
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use
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of these products.
Instead
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they can be motivated to play outdoor games or other activities. Today we see more and more
children
at very early ages suffer
with
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eye problems
such
as
mayopia
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myopia
,
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and hyperglucomia
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hyperglucomia
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hyperglycemia
. If we take
necessary
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steps, these problems could be solved easily.
To conclude
,
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the limitation
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limitation
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limitations
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of gadget
uses
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use
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should be maintained and properly checked by parents.
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