Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

These days people place a premium on having a better life. Some people think that gone is the idea of having a stable
situation
, you must try your best to improve it, while other argue, that it is better to accept the
situation
. In my opinion, you should do your best to
change
a bad
situation
. To advance a convincing theory I could deal with, these days our lives
is
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really hard. If we want to accept all of the
pursurs
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pursuers
, in future
noting
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nothing
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will
change
, but only,
we
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as we
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get older. And it has ill effects on our health.
For example
, I have read many books about
this
topic. Accepting your way of life due to its hardness had come under fire by their writers. If we don’t have any plan for
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, to
change
our lives,
you
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we
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won’t have any anxiety to continue.
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to what I have just said you will get
depress
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. You must try hard to
achive
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achieve
your goals. No matter what you want or what you want to
change
.
Although
you must have a plan to replace or
change
things, don’t forget,
you
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that you
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shouldn’t annoy yourself
for
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present
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situation
. You must be calm and accept that you can’t
change
it right now, yet you can have a plan for it.
For instance
, I can remember when I
have
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started to work. I tried different jobs.
The
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income was low and sometimes I worked for free. I really had a hard time. But now, on the grounds that I have many work experiences, I can apply for any company that I want with
good
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income. I have
also
save
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a lot of money
that
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so that
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I can
stablish
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establish
my own company. To conclude, you must fight for a better
situation
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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