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Some people think parents should supervise their children's activities closely, while others believe children should have more freedom. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #parents #children #activities #freedom
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emissions
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 in the U.K., Sweden, Italy, and Portugal from 1967 to 2007. As you can see, the CO2 emission in metric tonnes
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 two countries, Portugal and Italy gets higher
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 the years. The
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 the years. The
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 of CO2 per
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 in Portugal in 1967 was only about 1.8, but the number increased to 5.8 in 2007. The same trend goes for Italy, the
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 4.1 in 1967, and increased to almost 8 in 2007.
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 the CO2
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 in metric tonnes of the United Kingdom and
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Sweden
 get lower between 1967 and 2007. The average CO2
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 up to 10.4 in the UK, but decreased to 8.4 in 2007. In Sweden, the
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 8.2 and increased to 10.1 in 1977. But, it drastically decreased to only 5.8 in 2007. In conclusion, the average
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 very different trends.
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