At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?
Societies are responsible to determine the future of countries. These days, the population of middle-aged reaches at the peaked, which is opposite
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to
number
of elderly ones. Use synonyms
This
essay will explore both opinions and express negative and positive sides.
On the Linking Words
one
hand, there are several opportunities that we will gain from Use synonyms
higher
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a higher
the higher
number
of young generations. Use synonyms
Firstly
, it may increase the Linking Words
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number of
productivity as more people are working. Correct quantifier usage
apply
Thus
, the new innovation might breed as well as the new perspective, Linking Words
consequently
, a developing country could turn into a developed Linking Words
one
in just Use synonyms
few
years. Change the article
a few
For instance
, Linking Words
to build
a start-up company has been popular these days, Change the verb form
building
this
company mostly is run by a group of fresh graduate students who bring Linking Words
new
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a new
idea
in Fix the agreement mistake
ideas
this
digitalized era. Linking Words
One
of them is GO-JEK, a well-known company which creates a huge Use synonyms
number
of jobs for unemployment in Indonesia. Use synonyms
Secondly
, when a Linking Words
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to consider
consider
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considerable
number
of people are working means Use synonyms
increasing
amount of income that Correct article usage
an increasing
country
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the country
gain
. As an illustration, when all industries are reaching their optimal productivity, Fix the agreement mistake
gains
then
, they will probably obtain more money and could afford to pay Linking Words
for
the tax. Change preposition
apply
This
tax can be located for improving the facility of countries.
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On the other hand
, Linking Words
this
period of time might be full of risks as the authority has a bigger responsibility to direct the residents. Linking Words
This
young group must have multiple skills that help them to compete with others. Linking Words
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Besides
this
, the authority should Linking Words
also
create more job opportunities. Linking Words
Otherwise
, criminal cases will certainly leap because many people are Linking Words
being
unemployment. Unnecessary verb
apply
For example
, recently there was an increasing Linking Words
number
of criminal cases in Indonesia, many robbery cases occurred several nights and when the police arrested the gangster, most of them were in Use synonyms
20s
.
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their 20s
this
era of population growth might be the challenging Linking Words
one
as the government has a lot of jobs. Use synonyms
Nonetheless
, when they could educate their society and train their skills, Linking Words
then
, many improvements will definitely happen in the country.Linking Words
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