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Some people think high school graduates should travel or work for a period of time instead of going directly to study at university. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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After graduating from high school, contemplating a tertiary
study
 or gaining some non-academic
experience
 is significant for each student. The merits and demerits will be looked at in
this
 piece. Some argue that adolescents should travel aboard or
working
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 before enrolling
a
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on a
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university in order to clarify their personal goals. You can
found
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find
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 what you need and what you do not have from the
experience
,
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apply
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 so that you can have
clear
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a clear
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 target when you have
further
study
. Taking my brother as an example, he went to Australia for
a
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apply
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2 years working holiday after secondary education. During
the
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this
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 period, his mindset becomes mature. He obtained a
bachelor
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bachelor's
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 degree after his trip, and now he is a successful accountant.
On the other hand
, time is precious,
having
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 other
experience
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experiences
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 may postpone your success in future. Since 18 years old to 30 years old is the golden period for a person, People
facing
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face
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a
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the
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 risk to gain nothing in
this
 blank period.
Nevertheless
, it is a good chance for teenagers to set up their goals.
Study
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 is one of the methods to invest in your life. The
experience
 of
career
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a career
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 and living overseas can be your key to success as well. In a nutshell, even though obtaining
experience
 which is irrelevant to your
study
 may waste your time
of
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in
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 life, it may help you to build up your own values and go straight to
the
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your
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 ambitious aims. I wholeheartedly deem that it is worth
to spend
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spending
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 time
on
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apply
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preparing well for your future.
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