Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is being argued that increasing the
price
of
petrol
is the way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.
However
, I totally stand against
this
idea because of uncontrollable inflation and urban chaos. The main reason for my
disgareement
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disagreement
with
this
idea is a sudden rise in prices. since in some countries with an oil-based economy
such
as my country, Iran,
petrol
is considered a basic commodity , any
fractuation
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fraction
fluctuation
fractionation
in its
price
could affect the prices of all other items.
for example
, two years ago the
price
of gas was tripled which lead to an increase in
cost
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of other products from
grossery
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grocery
to
electronic
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to public
transportation
.
This put people
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under severe economic pressure.
Subsequently
, traffic and pollution may reduce to some extent. yet it is not worth to economic
harms
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it
cuses
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causes
. Another reason for my disagreement
to
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this
proposition is the city life issues. In most cities of the
world
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public
transportation
is not improved. There are not enough bus lanes and metro lines. The intervals between buses are too long. Public
transportation
is crowded and uncomfortable. As a
resultof
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result of
simple rain
snowfall
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people are not able to commute to and from work. If
petrol
price
were increased, the majority of society would not be able to afford it and tend to the public
transportation
which is not improved.
Consequently
, city life could be disrupted, because there is not enough public
transportation
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is
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comparison
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the number of individuals. In conclusion, to reiterate, I disagree with making
petrol
more expensive to control traffic and pollution because of unmanageable
price
escalation and municipal anarchy. If
this
solutionis
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put into practice, it could have detrimental impacts.
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  • discourage
  • incentivize
  • environmentally friendly
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • pollutants
  • alternative energy sources
  • sustainable economy
  • disproportionately affect
  • daily commuting
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • comprehensive solutions
  • public transportation systems
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