One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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on people’s life length. The benefits
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medical care are countless.
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and etc. can get their normal
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and routines back.
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can stay
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to him will be lower.
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the positive aspects is that older people with Diabetes can prolong their living time and that way they can look after their grandchildren, while their parents are away at work. The negative side of
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they can be limited to pension funds
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because it is not covered by their insurance.
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it can be for nothing if the results are not positive. Another drawback is the side effects.
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chemo-therapy can lead to hair loss, throwing up and energy loss. My own opinion is that it can never be a minus to have some options. There could be hundreds of ways to make it work. For me the chance of living is enough, considering the cons. To conclude, we started
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I included my point of view, which is that improved medical care is always a positive even with the consequences of it. People should always try and never lose hope, even if it looks impossible.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consequences
  • improved medical care
  • life expectancy
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • healthcare
  • quality of life
  • population
  • economic burden
  • elderly
  • dependency
  • technology
  • ethical concerns
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