Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are two kinds of individuals in the world: The ones who settle with what they have and the others who will keep endeavouring to improve to reach their dreams. While some think that when a bad condition like unpleasant work or a cut of money happens, the best action is to accept, others believe that in these situations it is better to endeavour and develop. From my perspective, trying for the greater condition should always be the preferable choice. In the following paragraphs, I will explore the rationale for both beliefs as well as proffer justification for my own viewpoint. Regarding those who hold that being okay with the unwanted situation is the best choice, there are many reasons. One supporting
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is that, if an individual leaves the current conditions that they have, even if
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intolerable, and tries for something else, it may not turn out to be better than the former and eventually they might regret it. More specifically, there
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a better profession with a better salary;
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, most of them could not even find one after they quit their unpleasant jobs and
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situation put them in a much worse position than they were before. In fact, my friend April resigned from her career as a civil engineer due to the low salary, and because of the current economy of the country that she resides in, she cannot find another job and she is unemployed for three months now.
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, I firmly believe that a person should not settle for something
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unsatisfactory. The obvious reason is that
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can mitigate unpleasant conditions and achieve their dreams eventually if they try hard about their goals. 40 years old woman called Emilia Rose is a shining example of how
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can even achieve their goals after a certain age. I came across her on the BBC news yesterday and she began working as an entrepreneur after she resigned from her job as a primary teacher. She said that she had never been
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happy in her whole life. In sum, I maintain that a person can increase the wellness of their unpleasant situation by trying and they should never accept the bad conditions they have. I hope that many more
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notice that they do not need to settle for anything upsetting and try more to achieve their true happiness and goals.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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