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In many countries people tend to move overseas or move to a different part of their country after their retirement. Discuss why it is so and the outcomes of this situation. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion

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plenty of countries relocate to a new
place
 after
completetion
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completion
 of their services. In the following
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eassy
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 we will discuss the few reasons
of
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 moving to
different
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 location and will discuss
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the solution
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 that.
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their
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 are
plethora
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 of causes to move
at
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a
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differnt
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different
 places.
Firstly
, during
there
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 working time they have to live
on
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in
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 a particular area because posting by the government,
thus
 when they get
retire
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 from their work
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they
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the
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they
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 want a new atmosphere around them.
Secondly
, in some
countries
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 it is difficult to find a new job
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further
 survive so
the
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they
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 decide the move to
a other
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another
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 country.
For example
, In
India
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,India
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 many
government
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governments
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as well as semi-government
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, as well as semi-government sector,
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sector
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sectors
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 provide
residencial
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residential
Residencial
facilties
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facilities
 to their employees so when
the
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they
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 retired they have to leave the provided home.
On the other hand
, the stop the movement of masses in the same area organizations should take
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initiative
iniciative
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 by providing them
to
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 other alternative work, which will help them to complete the basic
aminities
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amenities
 of their family.
Moreover
,
people
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 more than 60 years and retired from any service, administrations of the provinces should provide them
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 residential colony so that the stress of construction of
new
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 home will decrease
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they feel free from any burden of extra cost
to
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 living.
Furthermore
, private companies should
aslo
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also
 pay
monthly
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a monthly
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amount
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amounts
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 to their
parmanent
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permanent
 workers when they retired
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there because they spend the essential period of their life in the growth of that organization. For
instant
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, a survey proved that
,
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some private sectors in many
contries
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countries
 give regular
salary
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salaries
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 to their employees until the end of life. To recapitulate, some people are habitual to relocate from one
place
 to another
place
 but at the same time certain individuals have to move to a different
place
 to maintain family lifestyle and government of the
contry
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country
 and industries should have to arrange
other
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 way to survive after the person get retirement.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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  • Prediction or recommendation

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