IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4.5

In the future, all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you Think the advantage of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

#future #cars #buses #trucks #driverless #people #vehicles #passengers #advantage
It is known that many people prefer to live in urban or large areas because of the high standards of living.
However
, there are many
problems
 in these
cities
 that are likely to be a major cause of their impact on people.
Therefore
, some solutions will be presented in
this
 article that can solve these
problems
. Overpopulation is
one
 of the most common causes.
This
 is due to the presence of many features and recreational places
such
 as medical
centers
Change the spelling
centres
show examples
, education, vacancies, etc.
In addition
, large
cities
 are among the most vulnerable to diseases.
For example
, in recent years, specifically during the
Corona virus
Correct your spelling
Coronavirus
show examples
 pandemic, large
cities
 were the most infected with
this
 virus.
In addition
, air pollution is
also
one
 of the causes of diseases
such
 as respiratory diseases or even lung cancer, among others.
One
 of the proposed solutions to
this
 problem is to provide a better life outside the city in the villages. And the rehabilitation of medium or small
cities
 to relieve pressure on major
cities
. Governments must
also
 provide services and build health facilities in villages and isolated areas to avoid overcrowding in major
cities
.
Finally
, governments must act quickly to avoid
further
problems
. Big
cities
 face countless
problems
. In my opinion, I think that the provision of services of all kinds is
one
 of the factors that address these
problems
.
Submitted by aramt1418 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: