In developed world, average life expectancy is increasing what problem will discuss for individual and society? Suggest some measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing population.
Over
time
, technology and science has
been made life easier than past. Change the verb form
have
Individual
faced Fix the agreement mistake
Individuals
with
many problems in the past Change preposition
apply
for
instance: natural Add the comma(s)
,for
disaster
and Fix the agreement mistake
disasters
disease
. Nowadays with Fix the agreement mistake
diseases
expansion
of science and technology Add an article
the expansion
an expansion
human
tackle many problems and because of that life expectancy is increasing which is worthy for humanity Fix the agreement mistake
humans
however
its
costly for society. some problems Replace the word
it's
it is
is
related to caring for Change the verb form
are
elderly
and Correct article usage
the elderly
insurance
and solutions are Fix the infinitive
to create
create
nursing homes and Wrong verb form
creating
take
more tax from Wrong verb form
taking
people
.
Over
Correct your spelling
Overtime
time
when individuals get older. They
usually unable to do their routine Add a verb
areThey
wereThey
works
and need more help. In the past, Fix the agreement mistake
work
careing
elderly Correct your spelling
caring
people
was traditionally the responsibility of families but nowadays families are busier than past and don’t have enough time
to look after the elderly people
because they usually have a full-time
job in
addition, Add the comma(s)
,in
disease
rate Correct article usage
the disease
are
increasing Change the verb form
is
everyday
and Replace the word
every day
its
costly for Change the word
the
insurance
offices. it
Change the pronoun
its
impact
on economics.
As the tackle mentioned, The best form of Change the verb form
impacts
care
for the elderly depends on the family situation. It depends on whether family members have the time
resources. Thus
, governments should invest money for
facilities and training for Change preposition
in
care
workers. Because they trained better than a family member. Also
, governments must invest on
preparing Change preposition
in
residental
homes as much as Correct your spelling
residential
country
need. Correct article usage
the country
beside
Replace the word
besides
this
, insurance
organization
should get more money and invest it on Fix the agreement mistake
organizations
provide
a better life for elderly Change the verb form
providing
people
. This
work helps to
economic growth.
In conclusion, taking Change preposition
apply
care
of elderly people
and paying their costs are important and it is better to
Change preposition
for to
people
invest some money in insurance
offices for elderly
age and Correct article usage
the elderly
government
prepare Correct article usage
the government
residental
houses Correct your spelling
residential
Residental
Correct your spelling
and
an
trained nurses for taking Correct your spelling
and
care
of elderly people
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