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People’s shopping habits depend more on the age group that they belong to than any other factors. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Recently, shopping has become increasingly popular among most
people
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. The argument that
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's shopping depends on the age group that they belong to than any other
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factors
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 has become a contentious issue. I totally agree with
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 but holds some variations. I believe,
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, that age-brackets influence buying habits, but there are other
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 like media influence and the economic status of the person. In
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, it can be observed that adolescents and teenagers prefer buying electronic gadgets, so that, they can download numerous games on them and play.
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, age is not a dominant element accountable for any purchasing trend. There are other
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, provided that, an individual is not influenced by the buyer of a particular product, he will not pursue it. Here, media plays a vital role.
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 get influenced by the adverts that are done by their favourite celebrities and sportsperson. Having said that, they buy these products to abide by them. To illustrate,
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 buy a new brand, if they are advertised by a celebrity.
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, Media has the potential to affect the buying habits of
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, the Financial status of a person
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 depicts the buying rage because of their more purchasing power.
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 tend to buy more when they have more income. A study by the marketing department of Ontario university has shown that wealthy
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 buy 30% more than others, even if, they are not in need of that product.
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 an additional factor in
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 trend. In conclusion, Considered with the above information, and after deliberating all the facts, it can be deduced that shopping routines belong to many other components than the generation pack. I strongly feel that
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 buy products when they are completely influenced by their usage of it, irrespective of the age groups they belong to. Purchasing power and social influence are
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 to depict buying preferences of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping habits
  • age group
  • generational differences
  • individual preferences
  • interests
  • socioeconomic factors
  • cultural influences
  • marketing strategies
  • advertising
  • online shopping
  • technology
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