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Currently children have less responsibilities than they had in the past some say this is a good change some argue that it had negative effect on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion based on your personal experience.

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Children
 nowadays have fewer
responsibilities
 than they used to have in the past. In the past,
children
 used to support their parents with household activities, do some earnings, and look after their siblings whereas it is not the case these days. While some
people
 argue that
this
 is a positive change, others believe that it affects
children
 negatively.
This
 essay will compare and contrast both of the opinions along with my opinion which is in the favour of latter view will be discussed in a sensible conclusion. Initiating with the points supporting the
first
 school of thought,
firstly
,
children
 can give their attention to studies. The
people
 who support
this
 say that
children
 will not be stressed about other unnecessary things like in the past.
Secondly
,
children
 will
also
 have spare time to involve in extracurricular activities. In fact,
children
 nowadays are multitalented and represent their countries through academics, sports, and higher intelligence. As a consequence, it is the betterment
for
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 the family and country if
children
 are not given huge
responsibilities
. On the contrasting side,
people
 who held another viewpoint say that
children
 having less responsibility take everything for granted. They believe that
children
 without
responsibilities
 are like
people
 without aims. There is no motivation for those
children
.
Furthermore
,
children
 not having
responsibilities
 to look after their siblings and family in the future tend to spend time and money carelessly compare to responsible
children
. To conclude,
children
 in the past did perform excellently in academics and other curriculums even while having more
responsibilities
 so I believe that there should be a balance between
responsibilities
 and daily life.
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