The media is increasing interest in famous people who have ordinary backgrounds. Why do you think people are interested in the lives of famous people? Do you think this is a good thing?

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people have

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higher interests in

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worth it and

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will enumerate the reasons behind that in

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with, these well-known individuals serve as role models to a majority group and

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their stories.

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, the national science and maths quiz mistress in Ghana is one of the most educated and learned

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in my country and my personal role model. I have read a

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about her from the press because I want to be like her in the

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of television shows that host these personalities to talk about their life, how they started and how they were able to come

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, it really encourages the youngsters never to give up in life when there is a failure. To illustrate, I once watched an actress talk and that faithful day, I was feeling blue but after the show, I felt like been on the ninth cloud.

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of new ideas the new generation can learn from them. In conclusion, these popular individuals in our cities can be our role models, they

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motivate us and

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from them. I strongly agree that the media should continue to showcase them ,

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for the young

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ordinary backgrounds
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