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Increasing travels between countries enable people to learn different cultures or to increase tension between people from different countries?

#countries #people #cultures #tension
In
21st
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the 21st
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 century
traveling
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travelling
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 from one country to another is an easy way to have a better understanding
about
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of
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 other cultures and religions. But some
people
 believe that different social backgrounds can create conflicts between tourists and local
people
.
However
, I strongly believe,
on
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for
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 some compelling reasons, that despite the minor tensions between
people
,
global
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a global
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 journey can help us to know other
people
 better and get us closer to each other. In the
first
 place, communication with other
countries
bring
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brings
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 business opportunities for both
travelers
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travellers
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 and local
people
. It is abundantly clear that tourists spend a lot of money on
residence
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a residence
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, food, visiting monuments and even local products, and
on the other hand
 tourists, based on
needs
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the needs
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 of the visiting country, can find global markets for selling their own products and investment opportunities, like how nowadays Iranian
people
 export saffron to almost all over the world. For
second
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 reason, by
traveling
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travelling
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people
 from different
countries
 know each other better and
this
 better understanding may modify their past misconceptions about other cultures and religions which they had previously insisted on.
For instance
, in the past decades’ Arabian
countries
 and western
countries
 always had conflicts with each other, but nowadays we can obviously see that they’ve decided to have a lot of business and cultural relations
to
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with
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 each other in so many different fields. According to these analyzes, it is patently obvious that knowing other
countries
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countries'
country's
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 cultures and having
relation
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relationships
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 with other
countries
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countries'
country's
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people
 are crucially significant issues and causes
that
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the
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 advantages of
traveling
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travelling
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outweighs
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 its disadvantages.
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