You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter * Explain why you changed jobs * describe your new job * tell him/her your other news

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Dear John, I hope you are well. We haven't chance to hear any news from each other for a long time. I have big news that I want to share with excitement. As you know, I worked for Akbank for 7 years and was waiting

for getting

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a promotion

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apply

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senior vice president.

However

top

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the top

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management of the bank took a decision

tomhire

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to hire

a manager from another bank. I'm disappointed of

couse

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course

and thought that I lost my

change

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chance

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that's why I began seeking

for

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apply

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other job

opportinities

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opportunities

. ı didn't want to waste time meanwhile.

First,

I updated my

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profile, which HR professionals and head hunters monitor,

then

, reached my business contacts to find out if there were any job vacancies. I had supposed it would take some time

getting

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appropriate

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an appropriate

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job offer but contrary to what I thought

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apply

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2 weeks, after taking

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apply

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action,

Denizbank

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the Denizbank

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HR department reached me , inviting me to come in for an interview.

Interview

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The interview

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went

smooth

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and 2 days after the meeting, I

was requested

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have requested

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an offer as the group head with satisfying pay and benefits. Now I have

company

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a company

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car so I am able to take you to a picnic especially regardless of distance. At Denizbank, I am

responsiable

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responsible

for

credit

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the credit

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cards

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application process, forging an appropriate relationship

within

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between

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salesforce and

head quarters

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headquarters

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teams. Creating and driving sales

campaings

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campaigns

campaign

is a significant part of my duties.

Everthing

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Everything

is fine outside of work as well. I wish to hear news from you ASAP Take care of

you

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yourself

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, Mert

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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

1 paragraphs

257 words

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You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter * Explain why you changed jobs * describe your new job * tell him/her your other news

Structure your letter

Topic: In many countries around the world rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing.

As the world becomes technologically advanced,computers are replacing people at more and more jobs. what are some job positions that may be lost because of computers?What are some problems that may result from this situation?

In some countries, secondary schools aim to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. Which do you think is appropriate in today’s world?

Nowadays, many people have to work longer time, and they feel more stressful than before. What are the reasons? What can employers do to make their life easier?