With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered and some are even facing extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What can be done to deal with this problem?

With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal
species
are becoming endangered and some are even facing extinction. Do you think it is important to protect
animals
? What can be done
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deal with
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problem many problems are that lead to some
species
animals
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of animals
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destroy
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such
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deforestation and hunting.From my
persoective
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perspective
,
government
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should protect
form
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from
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these
animals
that are their limited number.
To begin
with,
government
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can build a special
place
for these
animals
that can live
comfortable
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in
this
place
.
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, these
place
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protect from these
species
and hunters can not go there.
in particular
, they are increasing in number.Despite the fact mentioned, if they live in
this
place
they do not have freedom as
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as
befor
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before
.
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,
animals
forget some skills like that, hunt
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finding food for themselves and it is
the
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obvious drawback.SO, they tend to comfortable
life
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.
Second
, by doing
this
people
can see rare
animals
and
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believe that, when
people
see them,they are more responsible
in
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protection
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specific
species
.
In particular
,they give
diffrent
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different
advice that
are
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important for them.
Furthermore
,when
people
want to see them,they are comfortable and they feel safe.So more and more
people
can go there every day and it
maybe
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help
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government
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in
economy
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for
this
place
.In general
government
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the government
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can
imprive
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improve
this
place
for
animals
. To sum up,
government
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should responsible against protect
animals
that can live as safe as
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before
when humans did
kess
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less
harm to nature.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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