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9. In some countries the government promotes public transport as the primary means of transportation, and discourages private vehicle ownership. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation. Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

#countries #government #transport #transportation #vehicle #ownership #situation #support
The fact that a couple of national authorities
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 encouraging citizens
choosing
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 public means in daily life
instead
to
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 personal transport. I totally agree with
this
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opt
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 buses or subways as primary means.
First
, reducing gas
emission
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 is one
of
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huge
advantage
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, it will help to do more fresh air.
Second
, the congestion
sittuations
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situations
situation
 are
significant
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 enhanced. As the result,
cummuting
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commuting
 in cities will be more easily for
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the resident
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resident
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 conclusion, using public vehicles will
brings
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a
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various benefits
in
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 not only
citizens
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to citizens
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,
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 but
also
environment
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the environment
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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