In the future, the main reason for going to the shopping mall will be for entertainment, not to shop. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, many

people

belived

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believed

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that the blooming of shopping malls in many metropolitan areas is

become

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more and more popular.

The

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number of

peole

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people

would prefer to go

shopping

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centre

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for

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shop

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shopping

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rather than

entertainment

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for entertainment

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in recent years,

while

some

people

belived

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believed

believe

the main purpose of going to malls

will be

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entertainment.

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, in

this

essay

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i

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will discuss

a

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apply

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various

reason

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reasons

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why it cannot be replaced by any

forms

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of entertainment. Perhaps we cannot deny the

subtantially

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substantially

increased of the service, which is

openned

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opened

in the

mall

centre, is attracted many citizens to come.

For instance

, shopping

acardes

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arcades

cards

which are bringing more and more

incomes

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income

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for the

mall

,

apprearance

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appearance

with various

option

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options

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for

people

to choose

such

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from such

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as gyms, cinemas, food courts, game centres, and bowling alleys. The metropolitans can have many choices to do and don’t have to spend time

to go

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far if they don’t have spare time.

However

, I am absolutely convinced that the

mall

centre is still a good place for purchasing with their friends.

For example

, many

people

don’t want to take their time

on finding

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brand

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brands

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in many different places, to make it easy they

chose

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choose

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shopping

mall

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malls

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to come

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because they can find all the

brand

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brands

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in

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apply

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here from

big-name

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big names

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to hidden

name

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names

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and

also

get a special promotion.

Besides

, you can have

amazing

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selection and deliver

a

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good customer service. Including, at the

mall

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mall,

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you can try on many clothes and get advice on products from shop assistants.

Besides

, all the

staffs

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are hospital and support to customer when they have some troubles.

Furthermore

, in the cold or hot weather, they always keep the air conditioner suitable with the degree in the outside. In conclusion, the shopping

mall

is still the place

for

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to

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shop and there

have

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a thousand activities to do in the

mall

.

However

, shopping is the main purpose they want to go

, and

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the owners will need to make sure they sell different things and provide a good service to attract more buyers.