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Nowadays online shopping has become more popular than in- store shopping . this a positive or negative development?

#in- #store #development
It is true that shopping has become more popular due to the arrival of new technology , online shopping benefit
time
 saving , discount ,
veraity
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veracity
 of
produch
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product
. One of the most important
benefit
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benefits
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 of doing shopping
from
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on
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 the
internet
 is that one can save
time
 and energy because the customer
not
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is not
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require
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 to go to
store
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the store
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 and
therefore
, they can save their valuable
time
 and energy.when someone does purchase from the market , they suppose to spend a whole day,
for example
 . I usually do shopping mostly
via
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online these days so that
i
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I
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 can save plenty of
time
 which can use for other work at home.
Consequently
 , the person can easily keep their precious
time
in
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on
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internet
 shopping without going out. Another key
advantages
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 is that people can save
their
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a
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 huge
amount
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amounts
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 of money if they do online shopping.
First
 ,no need to spend any extra amount for transportation by purchasing any items, from some
website
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websites
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. For instance , in my country In
india
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India
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, people spend
much
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apply
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on transport to go shopping in the market.
Thus
this
 is clear that online shopping always provides a number of benefits in
ones
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one's
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 daily life.
However
 , online shopping
some
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sometimes
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time
 adversely
affect
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affects
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 the people they maybe wait for many days to receive their product
also
 there is
chance
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a chance
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 of
damage
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 the product while transferring it. So it is a great impact that the customer who always rely on
internet
 buying. In conclusion, both
way
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ways
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 of shopping have
a
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apply
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positive and negative side
effect
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effects
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,
i
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I
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 feel that
internet
 shopping is far better than store buying owing to
it's
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its
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greater
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a greater
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 advantage.
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