Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

many are of the belief that

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for each country. while some individuals

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as education , health care and etc , are important as same as economic

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. there are rational arguments on both

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, followed by my point of view. economic development always is a sign of the government ‘s power

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authorities even sometimes will show their ability to manage the country and

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problems. because always economic

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provide

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a desirable condition for growth

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field. because

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subject in each decision . when a government want to run a new

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they have to

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project in terms of financial conditions and check all resources which can supply their needs

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they assess other factors.

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economy guarantees other decisions which governments have to do.

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, sometimes especially in poor countries,

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concentrating only on financial

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might prevent them to gain other improvements. because they have limited financial and natural resources. so they have to specify their resources

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as time and

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energy for critical cases

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care system. In conclusion, as far as I am concerned, and because of more

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effects

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of financial

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in each country I completely agree with

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statement

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governments must pay more attention to economic

progress

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but other sections are

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important.