Some people think that a huge amount of time and money is spent on the protection of wild animals, and that this money could be better spent on the human population. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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There are many
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before we humans got developed and their importance to the environment is unquestionable.
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many policymakers think erroneously that
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some
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with them is kind of
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useless
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how good can be the benefits of keeping the wild
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animals
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protection
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and aid the readers
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the facts.
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not only the ecosystem will get in trouble if the
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nature
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just lost their treasure but
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we humans as well. One of the
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in
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theme is about which animal will replace the function of a unique animal if they get extinct.
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, each alive body in the whole world there is their own
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, it is not that easy looking for a new one to do that specific job.
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the
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environment
could bring us awesome benefits that unfortunately people do not think as they should do about it.
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walk
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beside humanity but when
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money
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purpose changes at
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. Yes, the points mentioned above offer strong arguments
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there are many other subjects to discuss
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as our future health. One supportive argument states that some drawbacks
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theme can just destroy the
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traditional
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.
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the air that we breathe, the ecosystem as we know, the nature as we see wonder that it can
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disappear
if the
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do not
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scarys
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scares
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every single person
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expectation
policitians
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politicians
who make
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with that problem. In fact, we have to make wild
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safe as they deservers
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it costs
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, it should be priceless if we think well what they can return to the whole environment disturbing the nature can cause creepy problems, so it is important
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it in mind and treat them as our biggest treasure.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem stability
  • pollination
  • water purification
  • climate regulation
  • eco-tourism
  • scientific research
  • moral and ethical responsibility
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • financial cost
  • social issues
  • healthcare
  • education
  • fund allocation
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