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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Although
 some
people
 hold the view that doing the same thing every day during their lifetimes is a good way to live, others believe that constant
change
 is a superior way of living one's life. In my opinion, I think that striking a balance between those two ways of living
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 the more sensible view. On the one hand, doing the same routine every day can make
people
 feel comfortable and accustomed to the same situation. I think it quite a lot in older
people
 that prefer to earn a living in the same company.
However
, It is different from generation Y
people
 that motivate to find new work based on higher salaries and welfare.
On the other hand
, experiencing consistent
change
 can be enriching and more meaningful which helps to create unique memories to reminisce upon, but it can often be stressful and exhausting to some who cannot tolerate continuous
change
.
For example
,
People
 who always
change
 a workplace. They must stress at the beginning time in the new work because they must adapt to new peers and find a new route to transport for work. But some prizes came from your brave to get out of your comfort zone.
Moreover
, We can see from all developed countries' history that they were civilised by
people
 brave to
change
 a bad society. As we have seen, some
people
 believe that spending their lives doing the same routine forever can keep their content, while others think that regular
change
 is always better. I believe that in order for someone to live a fulfilled life, they need to balance between creating stability and bringing occasional
change
 into their lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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