Many teenagers now have their own smartphones. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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of the adolescents now have their own mobile phones with them. The main advantages are, to contact in emergency
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plus using Google
maps
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for route identification and disadvantages are, distraction on studies and making
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addiction to technology devices. One of the main
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is to contact the teenagers while
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an emergency situation.
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is mainly because their parents are very much worried, while they are roaming outside, which helps them to keep in touch
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needy
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. Another advantage can be using mobile
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to identify the new location while
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travelling.
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feature helps to search for any unknown locations by not reaching
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a remote location without any local access.
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, all world tourists while on international travel keep the
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assistance while roaming around their preferred destinations. The major drawbacks
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are making teenagers
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from their own studies. The majority of their
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watching promotional videos makes them lazy to concentrate on their lessons. Another disadvantage can be making more of
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addiction in life.
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makes them too difficult to live without any gadgets on
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beside for
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all the
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5 % of the teenage people
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admitted yearly
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hospital
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due to
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hours of using smartphones on a daily basis which
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an impossible way to quit the habit. To conclude, most
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the teenagers have their own gadgets with them making
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by
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which
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the parents can call them in urgency with
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use of Google
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for road assistance. The disadvantages can be their studies impacted
with
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distraction and addiction to
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the use
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of smartphones at all
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times.

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