With the improvements in today’s health care, society has to care for more and more elderly people. Do you feel that society will be able to cope with the increase in numbers of elderly people today and how can it be managed? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Developments in healthcare
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accessibility and availability to all
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. A discernible trend that has emerged, is the increase in the
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of elderly
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require special or extensive care. The rapid expansion of
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group may result in certain
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in today's
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. At
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, it is likely that
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may be unwilling to spend significant amounts of time and money on caring for the elderly as they direct all efforts towards improving personal lives.
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, the limited availability of vacancies in
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, specifically created for
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purposes will affect an individual's ability to shift the burden of caring for older
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, with ease. The elderly are
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more vulnerable to diseases and prone to falling ill regularly.
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, it's likely for considerable costs to be incurred by those caring for them.
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, hospitals may become more crowded and busy as drastic increases in the average
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of the population could lead to a greater proportion of
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requiring medical services. Though
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the consequences of an expansion of old
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groups do pose an issue for
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, they can
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be overcome by implementing sustainable and large-scale solutions.
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, building more care
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for the elderly will allow
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to effectively
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the rise in the numbers of the elderly.
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, as
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become older, the chances of them leaving the job market voluntarily or
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increase,
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introducing the need for care. In order to prevent
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an issue, local governments could introduce training schemes that allow older employees to equip themselves with new skills
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, motivating them to remain employed and encouraging employers to continue working with older workers. Solutions
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to cope with
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in the numbers of elderly
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in the long run.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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