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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion

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People are working to fulfil their needs,Though,Sometimes no
one
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 gets accurate feedback or energy in their working environment.Certain groups argue that if we have wrong
situations
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 ,
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 accepted the issues and continue to the
work
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 But some others mentioned that they overcome those
situations
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 and achieve the goals.I agree with the
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 opinion ,As I grew through that point of view.
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 essay will elucidate both standpoints before we reach the conclusion. On the
One
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 hand,Senior generations have the ability to admit any difficult
situations
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 and to continue the job smoothly.Because
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they prefer not only the percentage of the wage but
also
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 the quiet and calm atmosphere in their working environment.
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,In the field of agriculture ,No
one
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 gets the profit as much for their hard
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,But they continue to do
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 in that field .
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,they get a good mental attitude in the part of their job. So they prefer to accept the atmosphere and continue their carrier.
On the Other hand
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, the young generation doesn't accept the more stressful
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 environment.They immediately find a solution to recover from the current unmanageable issues in their
life
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.Most Teenagers are working to get good wages, and they enjoy their
life
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 ,so they need money.As we know everyone has only
one
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life
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 and
life
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 is very precious to each and every
one
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.
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, As we know that for every winner there is a number of times failure happened in the backside ,
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,They can get the mental stability to face any unexpected things. And
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, they try to overcome any problems in their
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 and enjoy their
life
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 with better opportunities and happiness. To conclude, Both viewpoints have their own importance depending on the situation. I
agreed
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 the opinion to everyone should overcome unhappy
situations
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 and find the better
one
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.we have the ability to maintain any issues smoothly.
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