Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

Most people would say that the present
time
is the best
time
to be alive despite
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others thinking that the best
time
was far far away , in some century in the history. In my opinion, nowadays,
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humanity has a lot more to do
comparing
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with our grandparents, which
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less
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attribution
to do.
This
essay,
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will discuss the most interesting things
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living today and compare
with
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an
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ancient
time
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.
A
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long
time
, our ancients, has no spare
time
at all, during their daily activity. Most of them need to work in a far, making their own food, take care
animals
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, look after relatives and keep working done day-by-day for their
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. At that
time
, money
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wasn´t
that
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important
how
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is today which could make life simple even in a rush
daily
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activity
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activities
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. Some points at
this
time
could be more attractive than today,
for instance
,
lay
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down to
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contemplate
the sunrise, fishing,
stay
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outlander and
sorrounded
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surrounded
by nature everywhere.
However
, at the present
time
,
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humanity
keep
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on
the
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insane routine and still has no extra
time
to afford a relaxing
time
. Doing
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work, cooking
a
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food,
look
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after
a children
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children
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and exercising could be more attractive with
the
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eletronic
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electronic
devices.
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time
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, we can clean our home using robots, we can look after children through the internet and cooking using an
eletronic
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electronic
pan. At
this
point
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we deny
in
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doing daily function in other to stay less with our
familie
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families
or even with ourselves.
Then
, money is so important that can
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by
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everything to facilitate routine. In my
opinion
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the past
time
seems to be more interesting to live in due to the
time
spending
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on you or in that really make sense. Our ancient knows exactly how to deserve a good quality of life.
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