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Everyone of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. What extent do you agree or disagree

#meat #health
These days many
people
 face several health problems due to eating
meat
 products some
people
 argue that , we should only eat
vegetables
 because health is so precious for everyone . agree with
this
 statement because
vegetables
 are good for
healthy
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a healthy
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life
.
To begin
 with , while eating
meat
 can cause health problems , adding
vegetables
in
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 your
life
 make
ourself
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us
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 healthy because
vegetables
 are the source of vitamins which are beneficial for our body.
for example
 , if we are ill and visited
to
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apply
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doctor
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the doctor
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 , he always
advise
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 us to drink vegetable soup .
Consequently
, if we take out products which contain
meat
 and add
vegetables
 we will be healthy in future too.
Additionally
, if
people
 removed
meat
 in their
life
 and come to the
vegetables
then
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they
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 mostly
people
loses
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their
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weight , because
people
 who consume
meat
they
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always have a high cholesterol level , and they are
also
 too fat.
Hence
 ,
vegetables
 are best for those who
wants
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perfect
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a perfect
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 body. To conclude, those who add
vegetables
in
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to
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 their
life
 they are always healthy and good for those
people
 who
wants
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want
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 a perfect body .
Thus
 if
people
eope
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hope
 removed
meat
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the meat
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 from their lives and leads a happy and healthy
life
.
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