In the past, people ate local in-season food, but now people tend to consume out-of-season food from different parts of the world. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In ancient times people tend to
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locally produced seasonal foods, but presently it changed to consuming internationally available seasonal
food
for eating.
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essay illustrates that the drawbacks outweigh the benefits which will be discussed in subsequent paragraphs. The drawbacks in
ancient
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era where scarcity of locally available
fruits
and vegetables makes people
to
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borrow from other parts of the world.
This
is because
of
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people
having
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more addiction to different types of particular seasonal foods from other nations
provides
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the opportunity to feel the
taste
.
Additionally
,
this
creates the ruling body to provide additional financial funds for importing
the
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goods from different parts of the planet.
As a result
of
this
process
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high burden of taxes
need
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to pay off at every period of
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by
the
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society.
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,
in
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Srilanka due to
non-availability
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the non-availability
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of seasonal
fruits
like
strawberry
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strawberries
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need to import from Switzerland by paying double taxes on importing to the country.
However
, the advantage of consuming
food
of
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internationally
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cuisines gives the pleasure of tasting
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at
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different occasions.
Also
,
as
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a
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locally available
fruits
and vegetables makes more detrimental
on
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health
at
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sometimes which prefer to try in
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manner.
Moreover
, frequent
travelers
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get the notch to
taste
the different
taste
buds on
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their
tongue
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for
life changing
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experience. To conclude, the usage of locally produced seasonal
fruits
and vegetables for consumption in past had changed now to
having
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international
food
taste
in their life.
However
, the disadvantages of getting seasonal non-availability materials and financial
in
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stable
condition
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conditions
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on importing outweigh the advantages of trying different international
food stuff
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foodstuff
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on particular occasions.
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