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Many people nowadays don’t feel safe either when they are at home or go out. What are the reasons? What can we do to solve this problem?

#people #don’t #home
It is true that there has been a rising concern about
the
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security when
people
 are staying at home or
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going
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gong
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 out. In
this
 essay, I will outline some reasons causing
people
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worry about their safety day by day as well as the ways to solve these problems. One of the main reasons is that there are more and more cases of burglary and vandalism. It happens more often, especially when
people
 spend their holidays and leave their house unmanned. After coming back, they find out that they have lost their valuable belongings at home or their properties have been damaged.
Besides
 that, due to the significant increase of private transportations recently, the roads are more frequently than ever before. Many accidents that lead to serious injuries or fatalities of travellers have been observed.
However
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 there are solutions to
this
 problem.
firstly
, authorities should strengthen the security system by deploying more officers to the habitat areas as well as installing more CCTVs for observation.
Leveling
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 education and reducing
unemployment
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 rate
also
 assist to reduce crimes remarkably.
Secondly
, public transportation needs to develop more to meet the daily demand so that
people
 freely switch to
use
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 buses or
trans
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 which are the safest means of
transportations
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. The less private transportation on the street the fewer accidents happen. To sum up, it is clear that the cause of
people
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 concern about safety everywhere is the increasing crimes and private transportations recently.
Nevertheless
, the issue can be resolved by the development of
such
 institutional policies.
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