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Obesity is now a major global epidemic. What can be done to tackle this increasingly common problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Most
people
 in today's generation waste money on frivolous items and have no control over their financial statements.
People
 spend a lot of money on luxury goods for advertising. The community is unable to articulate its desires and needs.  Both marketing firms and celebrity collaborations want to have an impact on the market. The general public is consuming contacts for the largest purchases. Financial institutions offer significant incentives to increase purchases and demand.
This
 is one of the most common ways
people
 purchase products that are either irrelevant or desired. Governments must announce profitable investments in the management of unwanted goods and services.
On the other hand
, in order to invest in unnecessary luxury, you must be an expert in understanding and managing your budget.
This
 means that
people
 set a monthly budget and use it
accordingly
.
People
 can manage their income by,
for example
, purchasing a home and investing in stocks.
Otherwise
, the government will have to restrict debit card usage. Because of fast food and a flexible lifestyle, most
people
 nowadays neglect their health.
People
 eat a lot of junk food, they are stressed at work, they have a personal life, and so on.
People
 must concentrate on their work.
People
 will
also
 be more alert and productive, and a well-balanced and healthy diet will benefit your health.
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