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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the would are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can government take to discourage people from using their cars?

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One benefit of moving the workers away from
city
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the city
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center
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 is that it helps the road congestion during peak hours when people flood to work in private vehicles.
In other words
, if the number of worker’s vehicles is reduced on city streets, a large percentage of traffic will obviously
declines
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.
For example
, when the destination shifts from
urban
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an urban
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 district to
countryside
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the countryside
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, the flow of traffic is likely to bifurcate,
thus
, traffic jams disappear.
Secondly
, housing shortage can be avoided due to the drop
of
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 demand following the relocation. It is a general understanding that people often accommodate themselves close to work, along with their family.
This
 can be seen in any major city in the world where myriad people seek
such
 comfort and convenience The traditional way to tackle
this
 problem was by building taller buildings, which means
to occupy
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occupying
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 air space over
land mass
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landmass
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.
However
, the booming
of
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population
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the population
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 has clearly exceeded the extremity of
this
 method. In fact, authorities are at the end of their rope with alternative solutions like limiting license plates or implementing
higher
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a higher
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 tax on real estate, which showed little effect.
Hence
, relocating parts of companies or
business
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businesses
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 to
rural
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a rural
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area
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 is possibly the
last
 resort
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