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Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The rise of
supermarkets
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 can be seen in several nations, they are rapidly expanding and building chains throughout nations. Some
people
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 believe that
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 will endanger local shops causing them to fail in competing with large companies. I will provide an explanation
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this
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 statement and give my opinion in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
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,
supermarkets
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 often have more resources to expend than local
businesses
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. They can import more
products
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 from abroad where it would be difficult for local
businesses
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 to source from.
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,
supermarkets
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 have adequate funds to buy
products
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 in bulk, allowing them to sell their goods at a cheaper rate to the public.
Secondly
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,
supermarkets
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 have various ways to build publicity in society. They have a structured strategy to attract customers by offering sales or promotions, so
people
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 are tempted to spend more on the
products
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.
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, they advertise themselves on television,
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in newspaper
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, and on social media, which
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 expose them to the public as a way to build
customer
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 base.
On the other hand
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, local
businesses
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 are often more connected to the community and know what the
people
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 want. The owners will often be presented in the shops so they are able to observe closely what
people
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 usually like.
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 will give them the advantage to focus on providing
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precise services and
products
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 according to the local demands. In conclusion, I only agree to a certain extent that
supermarkets
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 do cause competition as there are now more choices for
people
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 to choose to buy goods from.
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,
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 would not cause local
businesses
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 to close down as they can manage customer expectations better by meeting the needs of
people
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 from the
neighborhood
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.
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