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You have been doing some voluntary work to help your local community. However, now you are unable to continue doing this work. Write a letter to the manager of the organisation where you have been working. In your letter: - Describe the work you have been doing - Explain why you can no longer do this work - Recommend another person who is interested in the work

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Dear Sir or Madam I would like to offer my services in doing voluntary work. Given that I received charitable assistance throughout the early part of
education
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.
This
 kind of gesture would enable me to give back to the community my appreciation of the help rendered to me. The other is that it will boost my curriculum vitae.
Furthermore
, it is a great way
meet
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 new people, it will refine my valuable soft skills
help
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and help
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 me to gain experience and knowledge about how a hospital of your size operates. I would be quite happy to
ssist
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assist
on
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with
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 duties ranging from cleaning the maternity ward
,
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to, emergency
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emergency
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the emergency
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 ward to
do
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doing
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 with victims of accidents and other front line duties relating to covid-19. On top of that, I would not mind
to be
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being
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 part of
AIDS
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the AIDS
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 campaigning team, educating people benefits of ART to people living with HIV/AIDS. I would be
availableto
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available to
such
 duties at
anytime
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 convenient to the hospital. Thank you for considering my application. Yours faithfully, Florence Funhiro
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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