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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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As is obviously seen, modern society has been plagued nowadays due to many reasons which the most significant
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 to mention are
traffic
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 and environmental problems. It is argued by some that hiking the rate of
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 is the best measure to adopt to face
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 dilemma. Undoubtedly,
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 can be considered an effective remedial, but only for a short period of time. Other steps should be taken to tackle these issues. Pricy petrol could be a partial successful solution to solve both
traffic
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 and environmental issues. In simple words,
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 will limit the number of personal
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 on the street and sort out the expanding
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 for a short time, since some
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 might find the fee for different types of
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 unaffordable, especially for middle-class communities and gasoline related services. In
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 case, they avoid taking their vehicles out and start using other means of public transportation which will lessen the
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 congestion beyond doubt.
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, after a
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 as individuals are habituated to the current situation and
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 the weakness in urban transportation services, they revert to using their private vehicles. To give an illustration, in 2019 in Iran, the price of gas rose threefold over a night. It deterred
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 from using their automobiles temporarily. After a month, due to the aforementioned reasons, they started using their
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 again.
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, other programs could be believed as better
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 to take. One of the feasible solutions to solve the
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 obstacle is to encourage
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 to use the public transit system
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 of their own
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. In
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 scenario, the government can spend the extra income that earns by raising the price of
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 to improve the municipality’s services
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 as subway or BRT busses without increasing
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 fare of them.
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, individuals are likely to take public transport as an alternative
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 private
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.
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, in a major metropolis in Iran-Tehran- there has been a vast amount of investment so that citizens can travel around the city using the most modern and the best mass transit. The
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 way to address the problem of pollution in cities which must be done in long term is to subsidize the substitution of non-renewable
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 with green energy and equip existing
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 with
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technology
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.
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 is a decisive step to combat pollution as
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technology
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 is environment-friendly which causes the amount of CO2, a harmful gas that contains many toxic substances, to be decreased.
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a developed country like Japan, they have utilized
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 for the preceding decades and have
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 been successful in altering the opinion of the public and mass-producing
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-efficient
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 like hybrid
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 to be used
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 of gas-guzzling vehicles. In brief, there are numerous ways to control the problem of
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 and environmental problems, and raising the price of petrol is a temporary solution.
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, the most plausible measure to take into account is improving the infrastructure of public transportation and inspiring
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 to use them more frequently.
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, investments in car manufacturing to obtain the latest
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 practical as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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