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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

#minutes #topic #people #lives #change
Well,
Health
 plays an important role in our
life
. If our
health
 is too good
then
 we enjoy heaven on the earth but if our
health
 is not good
then
 we can not enjoy our
life
 properly. Some masses think that the use of high levels of
sugar
 in the food and drink manufactured
products
. Which causes many
health
 problems and they say
sugar
products
 should be made more expensive to encourage
people
 to consume less
sugar
. I totally disagree with that statement. I discuss our viewpoints in
further
 paragraphs.
To begin
 with, If sugary
products
 are unaffordable
then
 it knows as luxurious things and they totally impact poor
people
 only. Because rich ones buy it for any amount. So the best
way
 is that The
government
 have to restrict on the bases of age group because adults know its side effect so that's why they take them in limit. but due to age restrictions, the children are not capable to buy that product. Due to
this
, they eat sweet items with limitations. due to
this
, they have few
health
 problems and they enjoy their
life
 a better
way
. Moving
further
, The
government
 has to make strict instructions to the factories and the industries. the use of
sugar
 in their product is limited.
Moreover
, If someone breaks that rule
then
 the
government
 has to strict action against them. Due to
this
,
People
 are less addicted to
sugar
 and that
way
 in the future maybe they cut off
sugar
 from their own
life
. In conclusion, Increasing the price of
sugar
 is not a good
way
 to cut
people
 from
sugar
. The
government
 has to be aware the masses of the side effects of
sugar
. All in all, They have to make strict policies to control the
sugar
 level in the
products
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stability
  • routine
  • comfort
  • familiarity
  • fear
  • unknown
  • resistance
  • negative consequences
  • security
  • adaptability
  • growth
  • development
  • excitement
  • experiences
  • personal
  • professional
  • resilience
  • positive outcomes
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