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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving this message?Write 250 words.

#cultures #children #message
Many people argued that, in some
society
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,
children
are often encourage
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 that they can pursue anything if they work hard enough.
Although
 there
some
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 benefits,
such
 as building self-confidence and
optimistic
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, there are drawbacks that will be
expplained
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explained
 in the following paragraphs.
First
 of all, self-confidence and
optimistic
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 can be
develop
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 at the early stage of
children
. Self-confidence is very important in
children
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 life so they acknowledge what
their
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they are
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 capable of.
For example
, when they study hard for their exam, they will confident enough to nail the test. Optimism personality should be
also
 inserted
in
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 every
children
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 daily life so they can
enconter
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encounter
enter
 the challenge they face on. Optimistic
children
 can solve all of their problems with a smile on their
face
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. Building confidence and optimism is an excellent idea for developing their personality traits.
However
, there are
also
 major disadvantages for the
children
 if they
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this
 too far.
Children
 will become too ambitious
and
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makes
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 it very hard for
themselves
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 to accept failure. For illustration,
children
 will try to do anything to receive good grades even if it means
to cheat
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 on their
test
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.
This
happen
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 because they can't accept failure. Even though
,
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 it's good to have high ambition, sometimes there are times when people need to accept the result even if it means they failed. To sum it up,
eventhough
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even though
 there are some drawbacks
by
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 recommending
this
 statement like having too much ambition and barely
recognized
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 their failure, it
also
have
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it's
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its
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 benefits like good confidence and optimistic character.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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