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In the quest for development, many countries allow their natural environment to be affected. Such strategy is well worthwhile, and economic development should always be placed ahead of the environment. Argue both sides, and give your opinion.

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Many
countries
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 around the world are trying
advancing
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 their civilization and
improving
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society. In the process of doing so, a number of nations allow the
environment
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 to be excessively exploited, and there have probably been many controversies surrounding
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 predicament. Regarding personal opinion, it is crucial to prioritize the development of the economy over the well-being of the
environment
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 due to the following reasons.
Countries
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 worldwide require resources to be able to avert natural catastrophes.
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, the Black Death,
a bubonic plague
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the bubonic plague
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 which wiped out about 200 million people, has been contained due to the advancement in
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 system.
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, others natural disasters could be likely
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be avoided thanks to the evolution of technology. As
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technological and scientific improvement is almost certain to be inseparable from the development of a country's
economic
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, it is probably inevitable to sacrifice a portion of the
environment
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 to achieve that.
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 the above reason,
countries
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, in all likelihood, need economic power to build up their military. Nations around the world would likely take advantage of smaller and weaker
countries
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 to gain benefits for their own government. As a solution to prevent that from happening, some
countries
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 are in a marathon for military and economic power which may lead to environmental pollution. It might be claimed that it is not worth it to place the wealth of a nation above its living habitat. The argument for
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statement
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 is that
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 act would adversely affect the health and welfare of the people.
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,
human’s
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 lifespan and health
has
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 been almost assured to surpass those of the previous generation due to the progress in science. It would probably be unwise to stop unlocking our potential to create a better and more prosperous society. In conclusion, the development of a country is crucial for human evolution. It could ensure our safety from natural disasters and protect us from
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 threat of other hostile nations. Even though it might damage the
environment
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, it is necessary to continue the
endeavor
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 to expand our society.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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