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Writing Samples
Band 2.5

There are now many different kinds of internet sites and apps offering medical advice, but they all share one thing in common: they do more harm than good. Why might online sources of medical advice be said to "do more harm than good'? Present a counter-argument. To what extent do you agree with the statement?

I truly disagree with the
statement
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 "they do more
harm
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 than good", as there were not enough premises to claim that they really do more
harm
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. Internet sites and medical apps
didn't
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invent
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 for the same purpose
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 they have nothing in common.
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the
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society
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 beliefs, there are only a few people believe that online sources of medical advice could bring
harm
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 to them. Today, those digital
platforms
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 are intensely controlled by the legal act. Since
establishment
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 of relevant laws, the platform developers are required to make sure that the software systems are working in the appropriate manner. The
statement
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 can be true only in case of the
user
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 fault, as some users may intentionally use the platform in commercial ways
for gaining
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of
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their own benefit.
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,
the
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online digital
platforms
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 can do
harm
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 in
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 a
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way.
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 but not least, even the online
platforms
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 could do
harm
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. The
platforms
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' advantages in
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 of comfortability, accessibility, swiftness, eventually a social-distancing. These advantages are far beyond the implicit
harm
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,
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, the
statement
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 may be false.
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, I totally disagree with the
statement
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 despite the platform could do
harm
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 in
certain
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 manner. But we have nothing to do with it since the advantages from
platforms
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 are too strong to
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 with
such
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 minimal
harm
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.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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